How to write an admissions essay Harvard, Yale, MIT, and other top universities will love
Brenden Rodriquez got into Harvard with this essay.Harvard University freshman Brenden Rodriquez is immersed in the strenuous course load required of his mechanical engineering major.
But before he was accepted to the prestigious Ivy League school, he had to first navigate the tricky process of writing a stellar admissions essay.
His hard work certainly paid off. In addition to Harvard, he gained acceptances at Yale, MIT, Columbia and the University of Virginia.
Rodriquez brilliantly merged two of his passions — music and maths — to explain how each has shaped his life and made him happier.
Rodriguez' other impressive stats are included on his Admitsee profile. AdmitSee is an education startup that shares 60,000 profiles of students who have been accepted into university. In addition to admissions essays and test scores, the students list other data points for prospective students to browse including extracurricular activities and how students spend the summers.
Here is the fantastic essay Rodriquez wrote:
"I think about the converging waves of the notes I play, the standing waves being created by plucking a string, and the physics behind the air pockets being forged that eventually find a listening ear whenever I sit down to play my bass. Thus, my passions of maths and music synergistically become more together than they could ever be apart. I started thinking about this when a former maths teacher of mine approached me one afternoon and asked me if I was interested in giving the induction speech at the Mu Alpha Theta induction ceremony. Being a member of the honour society and recounting the memorable induction speech given the year prior at my own induction, I wholeheartedly agreed. I decided on the topic of music and maths because I play upright bass in the orchestra and electric bass in the jazz ensemble and being a maths enthusiast, it is impossible for me not to see the mathematics and physics present in music.
At music’s core, maths is present in the tempo and rhythm of a piece, with the time signature being represented as a fraction and the tempo being represented by a numerical value in beats per minute. The relationship between the two gets even more intriguing when applied to actual notes being played. The best sounding music is that which uses flawless mathematics. It is common knowledge that each note has a letter name—A through G—but also has a number value, measured in hertz. An A4 for instance is 440 hertz. In Beethoven’s “Moonlight Sonata,” there exist triads in triplet form. These triads are made up of D, F#, and A. Since sound is a vibrational energy, notes can be graphed as sine functions. When the triad notes are graphed, they intersect at their starting point and at the point 0.042. At this point the D has gone through two full cycles, the F# two and a half, and the A three. This results in consonance, something that sounds naturally pleasant to the ear. Thinking about this opened my eyes to all the aspects of my life with which I utilize maths to enhance.
There is also an incredible amount of unseen maths present in football. At 5 foot 10 inches [177 cm] and 160 pounds [72 kg] with pads on, I fall short of the average player at my position who is usually at least 6 feet tall [182 cm] and well over 200 pounds [90 kg], so applying maths to football is intellectually stimulating, but is more importantly a survival mechanism. When I have to go up against an opponent who is over twice my size and looks like he eats freshmen for lunch, brute force is not on my side and it helps having equations for momentum and attack angle running through my head. Maths not only helps me survive, but also thrive. As an opponent running back is darting down the sideline with seemingly cheetah-like speed, I can trust that my angles and velocity will allow me to make the play and possibly save a game-changing touchdown. Or when a ball is sailing through the air caught in the stadium lights, I can picture a projectile motion problem with constant acceleration downward and a near constant velocity in the x-direction, and know that I have a leg up on the player next to me who does not think about it the way I do. When I look at aspects of my life in a maths context, they make more sense and make things that I love even better and more enjoyable."